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Thanks to all my friends and teachers and everyone else who has gone on this blog that I got about a 9 days ago! I got 200 page views already which is CRAZY. Just wanted to say this thanks.

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CAMP

Here are 3 things I liked about camp:

1. Trolleys because they were intense
2. Pellet/slug guns because i had never shot a gun before
3. Paintball because I had never done that before.

Here are 2 things I found challenging:

1. BMX bikes
2. Going to sleep with my cabin mates

The gun was pointing right at my target, the metal strip, about 30 meters away. “The trigger’s broken again!” yelled someone behind me as I sturdy my hands. ‘Concentrate’ I told myself. Then BANG! TING! I had hit my target. I laughed with my friends who were cheering for me.I had done the best shot.

I hopped into the metal trolley, ready for the ride of my life down a hill. “Ready?” asked Tray from behind me. I sighed then said “Heck yes!” This was gonna be awesome! Then he let go. I felt myself gathering speed as I rushed down the steep hill, everything around me a blur. Then was the corner, ‘you can DO this!’ I thought to myself. So I pulled the muddy rope connected to the wheels and made the sharp turn. Then I turned slowly down the rest of the hill, it was AWESOME! When I got back up I said (or rather asked) “Can I go again?”

School Camp

Sorry I haven't blogged in a while, I've been on a school camp. We did shooting pellet guns, archery, trolleys going down hills, paintball. It was AWESOME! I might be able to show some pictures of it when I get them.
My favorite was the trolleys because we were going down this HUGE hill. My 2nd favorite was the pellet guns, 3rd was archery. Ill get those photos A.S.A.P.

The Erkinshires Start

Chapter 1

The Erkshires

Hello I am Rocky. I wish I could tell you my last name, but as they say, voices carry. I have a friend that sticks with me almost all the time so he can be near me. His name is Alizay. He is a normal person. Well he used to be. It started like this: It was a normal day, everyone was falling asleep in class as the teacher talked on. But something was wrong. I couldn’t tell what but something was definitely out of the ordinary. Then I realized it. The teacher had different eye’s. Hawk-like eyes.”Alizay” I whispered. “I think that something has happened to Mr Thomas.”

***

After school we all met at our secret place. We discussed what could be wrong with our teacher. As we were speaking a giant -

BOOM!!!!

-well that happened.  We looked around for the noise and saw a see-through shape in the sky (which took  about 10 minutes) and it was BIG! Suddenly a giant missile streaked out of no where and blew up the humongous ship that hit the ground really hard. We ran as fast as legs could carry us until, “I think we’ve lost them.” I said. “yeah” said Wailun. We walked back and decided that we would (for some reason) Keep this quiet to everyone except our family.

***

I got home and changed and did all the stuff I normally do then raced into my room and jumped on my bed. I was shocked! I told my sisters about what had happened. I have 5 sisters and I am the youngest in the family.  The oldest is Torch, then the quad (Hazel, Trident, Lilly and Faith too ) then there’s me. We all have different abilities (and so do our parents who are on holiday) mine is Earth. The quads are all water, and Torch is fire. We are the Elementals. We are the Erkinshires.

***

We were at the place behind the school to discuss what this meant.  Torch said she might know who it might be. She suggested it were the Hawkeyes. “Who are they?” Trident asked and Torch said “I am about to tell you.” And she did. “The Hawkeyes used to be our family friends. We would go on picnics and stuff together. But one day havoc broke out. You see a monster was running through the city. But the hawkeyes wouldn’t help the people. They had powers like us but only flight, vision and strength. We took down the monster and got really, really, REALLY, REALLY mad at the hawkeyes for not helping. We hated each other ever since.” “WOW!” said Wailun. I didn’t know what to say about that.

***   

The next day we were walking through the school when I saw Mr Thomas. He stared at me with those creepy, evil eyes, like a hawks. Throughout the day no one noticed his eyes. Then the thought hit me straight in the head like a bullet.  

The Erkinshires

Here is an example of my writing from this term. I am proud of this because I tried really hard with it. There is success criteria at the bottom and I filled in what I thought I had achieved as part of self reflection. I also conferenced with my teacher and she gave me editing and feedback advice. One thing I would improve would my detail because I don't feel I added enough explanation about the senses within my writing.

Thanks for sharing in my learning, I would really like your feedback.

Chapter ?

“Hey! Come back here!” yelled a hawkeye. The brother and sisters were running for their lives with classified information on their enemies. There was Torch the eldest, Hazel a quadruplet, and the youngest Rocky. Torch had brown hair and was quite tall, she was 23. Hazel and Rocky were blond haired, Hazel was 17 and average height and Rocky was 15 and almost taller than his sister.Hazel looked behind herself and saw that there was no-one behind them. “Hey guys!” panted Hazel. “They’re gone.” The siblings gave off a sigh of relief. Suddenly Rocky realised they were in a forest, he told the others. Hazel realised she was tasting blood and told Torch. Torch looked in her mouth.“This isn’t good Hazel” said Torch. Hazel had bitten her tongue badly and it was bleeding crazily. Rocky saw tonnes of blood dripping on the floor. He fetched a leaf he had read about in class, and asked Hazel to put it in her mouth. It stopped the bleeding. “What was that?” asked Hazel. “A healing-tree leaf” replied Rocky.

They decided on Torch collecting firewood as it was getting dark. The moon was glowing brightly to show itself, but the second moon was hidden by some tree’s. Now these were not ordinary kids. Torch had the power of FIRE inside of her. Hazel was a WATER ELEMENTAL as were the other 3 quads. But Rocky was different. He had the power of EARTH in his grasps. When Torch got back she lit the fire with her bare hands. The other two found that perfectly normal. Torch said she was going to look for more firewood. Rocky made a see-through shield around them (made of specks of dust and dirt) so they could rest.  “Today was EXHAUSTING!” said Hazel. Rocky agreed. Suddenly they heard a snap of twigs. Someone was spying on them.

Rocky had heard it first, he woke up Hazel and told her what he heard. Then they had an idea. Back through the tree’s the Hawkeye was spying on the Erkinshires. He was sure they had heard him stand on that damn twig. He looked at his watch, 12:00 am it read. Midnight. He saw the little boy point towards his direction. Luckily the sister just fell asleep and so did he. Later he heard them discussing the secrets of the Erkinshires. It was the jackpot!  The siblings were making up fake secrets so the Hawkeye would receive false information on them. The perfect plan.Then all of a sudden he ran off. The plan had worked. At 4:00 am Torch came back, and they told her what had happened. “Well guess what I found.” said Torch. “The ship!” she answered. They were saved! They laughed about the false information all the way home.

THE END

S.C :

Hook:           3/3

Third person:         3/3

Interesting words:       3/3

detail:             2/3

total: 11/12

Blog Commenting

WALT: Respond to texts online.

James came in and shared blog commenting with our class. I commented on three different blogs and really enjoyed seeing what other people have posted.